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Date Unknown, Time Unknown...Previous experience has taught me that as long as I sense no immediate danger then it's safe to take my time with this part. I've never been all that much of a morning person, after all, especially after a bad landing. However, nothing felt out of place - no soreness, no nothing. In fact, this place even felt... oddly familiar.I opened my eyes and took note of my surroundings. The room was typically Japanese, but that meant little. What truly drew my attention were the people in the room.There was the girls. A platinum blonde with gray eyes wearing what looked like an officer's duty-khakis; a girl in a tiger-stripe bikini and matching knee-high boots, green hair and little yellow horns; a girl with short brown hair, green eyes behind large, wire-rim glasses, and with two kodachi in her belt that clashed with her normal street clothes; another girl skin darker than the boy's wearing jean shorty-shorts and a strapless twist-top; a girl in black that exuded an absolutely poisonous atmosphere; another platinum blonde with a somewhat blank stare and odd devices covering her ears; .... and most shockingly, someone else I knew: a girl in a dark-colored sailor-uniform with long black hair."Rei? Is that you? Who are all these people?""Well, that settles it then. He's gotta be a slider if he knows your name." I looked to the new voice. It belonged to a boy it unruly black hair and the most unusual black marks under his eyes. "I apologize if your being here wasn't planned. Raven has a nasty tendency to throw me curve balls to deal with."I smiled ruefully. "Thanks, kid, but I'm a screwball."The kid grinned back. "Hah! Then I guess that makes me the floater that was disguised as a fastball." He then offer me his right hand, saying, "Ezekiel Darkwood, Avatar, 2nd Class, Unlimited. Friends just call me Zeke or Zii-kun.""Raven, huh? Met the guy once. Great to hang with, but never let him arrange your social calendar.""Ain't that the ever lovin' truth, brother."
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[In the manga, Misaki] names the angel Hikaru, after Hikaru Shidō from Clamp's Magic Knight Rayearth (a manga in Angelic Layer's world), which she was reading on the train to Tokyo, because she wants the angel to be "a short girl, but strong and happy" like Hikaru and herself. In the anime, Misaki names her Hikaru after her favorite doll from her childhood.
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I had lines and lines of are-you-seriousing, but in the end I ruled it "too caustic" and deleted it. It's just...man. Man? You just...you just unloaded barrel after barrel of very cool, very dramatic (and I'm being a mite sarcastic) plot twists on us. I don't know if what you've done has the desired effect, unless your desired effect was "The fuck is this? The fuck is that?" Shouldn't there be...I don't know, foreshadowing, or something? Some serious hinting that there is this crazy crap brewing behind the scenes, and that said crazy crap is going to go down? Or maybe you might not even need that, as long as you don't shove every single plot twist into us all at once. As it is now, it's just...what? What? He's a reincarnation? He's from our universe? He has cocktails of crazy drugs? Why would he have cocktails of crazy drugs? Why can he talk to the birds? Why is this god here? Why is he in the servitude of this god? What the fuck is going on? (That's rhetorical. I know what's going on, seeing as you spelled it all out for us. That's not the point.) You dropped all this on our heads in chapter two, without a "by the way", and I tell you, it's a little supremely unsatisfying. Like, you know what this feels like, at the very least? The chapter two from a completely different story, maybe.
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