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01/10/11 11:41 PM
blackaeronaut wrote:Jorlem wrote:Ah, sorry. I think that part of the problem I had with the power levels might have been because I'm seeing this in a planning forum, not in the story itself. That is, I'm seeing what you plan as the end result, and not the progression you intend to get there. Also, when I read the word 'Avatar', a part of me makes a sort of mental jump to Aang's avatar state, which I shouldn't be doing. I had enjoyed the chapters that you had written previously, and thought the power levels shown in story were ok, from what I recall. It was what was discussed in the comments that rang a few of my alarm bells IIRC.Also, if Zeke is a Whispered, then I can see that being a decent source of conflict with the UEC once it is revealed. Something along the lines of "If you hadn't been born a Whispered, I would have been the one that Raven would have picked!" Heck, this could be what drives him all the way to fully joining with Amalgam.Anyway, sorry.It's okay. Every now and then we all wind up doing something like that.Whispered status helping to provoke a bad reaction? Not a bad idea. Just have to be careful about running afoul of that cheesy 'I'll Show Them All!' trope - it's good in a comedy, but otherwise iffy.
Jorlem wrote:Ah, sorry. I think that part of the problem I had with the power levels might have been because I'm seeing this in a planning forum, not in the story itself. That is, I'm seeing what you plan as the end result, and not the progression you intend to get there. Also, when I read the word 'Avatar', a part of me makes a sort of mental jump to Aang's avatar state, which I shouldn't be doing. I had enjoyed the chapters that you had written previously, and thought the power levels shown in story were ok, from what I recall. It was what was discussed in the comments that rang a few of my alarm bells IIRC.Also, if Zeke is a Whispered, then I can see that being a decent source of conflict with the UEC once it is revealed. Something along the lines of "If you hadn't been born a Whispered, I would have been the one that Raven would have picked!" Heck, this could be what drives him all the way to fully joining with Amalgam.Anyway, sorry.
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