While re-reading to see what the changes were, I noticed a couple of possible typos in one section. In any other story, I'd be sure they are typos, but ... it's Zeke.
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I woke to the sound of fluttering wings and reflexively began to feel around. All I found in my bed was a hallow space that was still warm.

Is Zeke starting to think of Deimos as a demigoddes, or should "hallow" be "hollow" there?

In addition to the usual student’s compliment of stationary, workbooks and supplies,

As opposed to those mobile workbooks and supplies... Maybe some of his notes do wander off, and these are the others?

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Rob Kelk

"A voice can be silenced, but thoughts are immortal. Je suis Charlie."
- Vic Cook, January 8, 2015

Je suis Charlie.